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Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:09 pm

Hiyo! This is a selection of various pieces I've come up with throughout my poetic sprees. None are serious, but some have less silly streaks too.
I'll put one up per post, if that's ok, just to keep them clearer!

Let me know about thoughts, comments, feedback, always all appreciated. :)

Starting with a crowd-pleaser: Love Poem!



I want to show you
just how much you
mean to me.
I want to prove to you
that all will be fine.
I want you to say
that you’ll always be mine.
Because I love you
like Optimus Prime.

Now, I know what you’ll say
with that look of dismay
on your face, your eyes rolling
‘Well, that’s romantic..’
(When what you really mean is
You’re sad. Grow up.)
But hear me out!

See, if love poems should always start like this:
Roses are red
and violets are blue..
Well, Optimus has those same colours too!
So, believe me, please do,
when I say that I love you
like Optimus Prime.
And that this is my poem to you.

And if in any way I’ll hurt or wrong you
I swear to you I’ll change…
into a truck
and with some luck drive us away
from this place where we’re stuck
and we can…
Love each other.

And even if we hit a rough patch,
there is nothing that can scratch
the body of our alliance.
Because we’ll be fully equipped
with hidden arm cannons and a laser gun
so no-one will question us. No-one.

See, I know that I’m lucky
to have you by my side,
as I realise that you may come from Venus,
but I am definitely from Cybertron.
And that’s a lot to take on
even without Megatron.

And it doesn’t harm
that even at this speed I can
easily read the signs:
Danger! Curves ahead.
Because when all is said and done
I know that you love
and I love that you know
how to have fun.

So come on.
Admit that you love
that I love you
like Optimus Prime.

And that there is no doubt
that all will be fine.
And when this is over
we’ll talk spark to spark.
And without a word or without a sound
we’ll transform, and roll out.

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:10 pm

A decidedly much more fandom-y one, from Napowrimo 2014:

A True Fan

You must observe the figure
take in the curvature
the refraction of light on chrome
glint of flash on tinted plastic.

You must touch the figure
insinuate your fingers beneath
panels, permeate with life
the lifeless textured plastic.

You must lick the figure
savour the sweetness of the cracks
and edges of bittersweet ratchets
and salt tears of joy and plastic.

Then, and only then
you will become what I have been.
Then, and only then
you will be.. a true fan.

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Post by Va'al » Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:11 pm

And moving to more serious undertones, with TF cameo, from Napowrimo 2015:

Where

Where have my robots gone?
Is there another shelf for them
or desk on which to lead
their silent plastic lives?
A room that is one
and two and four
and a space that is more than
what it seems, more
than what it sounds.

Where has my artwork gone?
The wordland, the doctor,
the space between will and power
and better angels still?
No room for one more
as the walls are
laid bare again –
to prosper perhaps beyond
the boxed papers whispered
by faceless passers by
and sudden saxophones.

Where have my covers gone?
Are there no more layers
for them to build upon truths
and cushion the inevitable fall?
There is room for more
than one person
more than one body
to lie away
from the streets
more than one spirit
to inhabit the shape
left behind by another.

Where have my words gone?
Were they lost
where I last saw
where I last heard

Where will my room
find its space
find its sound
find its place
once it’s gone?

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by tainkirrahe » Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:36 pm

These poems are incredible! The first one gave me shivers and made me smile with the Optimus Prime bits, wow! Can't wait to see more from ya :]

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:41 pm

tainkirrahe wrote:
Fri Feb 02, 2018 9:36 pm
These poems are incredible! The first one gave me shivers and made me smile with the Optimus Prime bits, wow! Can't wait to see more from ya :]
D'aw thanks! That's still the one I use in Poetry Slams and events to make sure the audience are paying attention: see below.
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I haven't written neew robot stuff in a while, but I did have a brief one last year exploring pop culture in general, and I just found an old spoken word piece (perhaps my second?) on the toy collecting subject:



It first started when you were a kid
but you didn’t notice it seeping in.
It’s a phase, they say, he’ll get over it
and they turn their gaze onto their own little things.
You remember the first time you held one
the car, the truck, the wheels turning
and something stirring inside of you
gears and cogs, clicking and whirring
something shifting, ever so slightly.
But still, you didn’t notice it seeping in.
How could you, after all?
All it was, all they were, just toys.
Yet something more,
beneath the surface, always
more than meets the eye.
And for a while they became
your fantastic friends, guardians
of plastic memories, unscrewed pains
and loosened joys of coloured limbs.
All that time, it was seeping in.
That was then. Now, at twenty-two,
you dive your hand into
a sea of phases, fading into
an ocean of childhood obsessions
of a kid’s achievement and parents’ despair
in the shapeshifting forms
of cars, trucks and planes.
With care, you choose a fraction
from his collection, it becomes
a subtraction from your brother’s
affection as it joins your faction,
an addition to your own collection.
Although there are millions
in hiding through the world
this one is yours, and yours alone.

But all in all, as in any addiction,
one shall rise and one shall fall.
It’s either you or your plastic creatures.
You notice a change in their plastic features,
they’re begging for more, more comrades,
more plastic, my god it’s fantastic!
Is this what the matrix of leadership feels like?
Do I have the touch? I feel just.. prime!
I want more I need more they need to be mine!
As the frenzy builds up, you scour the net
you bet you can find one to complete the set.
A final addition, you promise yourself,
but in fact, as you look at the shelf
it’s just another token
of your plastic addiction.
Since it started, since the beginning
it’s always been either you
or your plastic creatures.
So far, they’re winning.

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Ha-Hee Prime » Sun Feb 04, 2018 11:35 pm

These poems are great, Va'al.
They're different from what I'm used to, so it took me a second to acclimate. But I love the way you use internal rhymes and build cadences for effect. And the quirky humor-that's-serious is great, too.

My favorite little tidbits: "and they turn their gaze onto their own little things" (because everyone has things they love; it's just that some are more widely-accepted than others)
and "a sea of phases" is such a neat way to put it: succinct and evocative.

Keep on trukkin'!

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Mon Feb 05, 2018 9:55 am

Ha-Hee Prime wrote:
Sun Feb 04, 2018 11:35 pm
These poems are great, Va'al.
They're different from what I'm used to, so it took me a second to acclimate. But I love the way you use internal rhymes and build cadences for effect. And the quirky humor-that's-serious is great, too.

My favorite little tidbits: "and they turn their gaze onto their own little things" (because everyone has things they love; it's just that some are more widely-accepted than others)
and "a sea of phases" is such a neat way to put it: succinct and evocative.

Keep on trukkin'!
Why thank you! That last piece is nowhere near as polished as it could be, but I got frustrated and had a deadline and had to learn it for the gig, so there it stands. All reference are intentionally cheesy, and on the nose, too. And thanks for noticing the internal rhymes element, it's a thing I try using a lot when writing.. I mean, I'm nowhere near the craft of say Hollie McNish: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8hIhTRKeW1A

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Valentine Special

Post by Va'al » Wed Feb 14, 2018 10:50 am

Some silly ones for the day, with accompanying images.

Roses are red
Alpha Bravo's a chopper -
how could you possibly
be any hotter?
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OP is red
and silver and blue.
Some claim he's a god
but I think that of you.

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Post by domsalvia » Wed Feb 14, 2018 2:20 pm

I completely missed this thread before and it was my loss. This is all awesome and I loves it!

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Wed Feb 14, 2018 5:19 pm

domsalvia wrote:
Wed Feb 14, 2018 2:20 pm
I completely missed this thread before and it was my loss. This is all awesome and I loves it!
Aw thanks! Have another couple from today:

Robots are orange
Dinos are yellow -
whomever you love
is fine, my good fellow.

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Re: Dark Horse - a poetry thread

Post by Va'al » Sun Apr 01, 2018 11:25 am

Poetry is serious business.

Shall I write of thee on this April’s day?
Thou art more lovely and more of plastic:
rough joints may plague thee– but hey!
some of this at least has been fantastic.
Sometime too hot the orange palette shines,
and often the pale complexion yellows
and every fair of toy sometime reminds,
by chance, of your franchise’s changing fellows.
But thy eternal glimmer shall not fade
nor lose possession of that mode thou ow’st
nor shall rust brag thou crumbl’st in its shade
when also in eternal lineart thou grow’st.
So long as haters seethe and eyes can roll
out loud I commit to you my own soul.

GloPoWriMo day 1

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